Please read and let me know what you think

lynnythegreat

This is a story about the last generation of this very large family.

The first one is kind of corny - it's how the future parents of this last generation fall in love, etc.;

Part one:
http://www.thesims3.com/contentDetail.html?contentId=202621

In part two the couple, Lilly and Todd are now married and starting life together;
Part two
http://www.thesims3.com/contentDetail.html?contentId=203225

In part three the couple has their first child and Todd quickly advances in his career; there are lots of other families that interact.
Part three
http://www.thesims3.com/contentDetail.html?contentId=203788

In part four more children are added to the family and the problems that come with families begin to show.
Part four:
http://www.thesims3.com/contentDetail.html?contentId=204782

In part five tragedy hits the family as they have their last child.
Part five
http://www.thesims3.com/contentDetail.html?contentId=204782

In part six the children are growing up and their oldest daughter has her first romance.
Part six
http://www.thesims3.com/contentDetail.html?contentId=205380

In part seven, the oldest daughter marries and has her first child. The others kids also experience growing pains and family tragedies continue to occur.
Part seven
http://www.thesims3.com/contentDetail.html?contentId=205831

In part eight; Lilly and Todd begin their golden years as their second oldest daughter also looks for a husband; Lilly's mother is lying near death when Lilly has a dream her mother is dying.
Part eight
http://www.thesims3.com/contentDetail.html?contentId=206228

In part nine all four girls are grown up and are either finishing school; having grandchildren for Lilly and Todd or looking for husbands of their own.
Part nine
http://www.thesims3.com/contentDetail.html?contentId=206903

In part ten the youngest daughter enters adulthood and marries her high school sweetheart while her older sister instead chooses a career in music; As the title states - time marches on for the family.
Part ten
http://www.thesims3.com/contentDetail.html?contentId=207529

In part eleven which is the final chapter; their youngest daughter begins to have children; Lilly and Todd starting having problems in their love life; and the end of their marriage is soon at hand; but not in the way you might think. This is the best chapter of the whole story.
part eleven
http://www.thesims3.com/contentDetail.html?contentId=208659

Sorry this was so long; but I would really like to know what people think; both good and bad before I start a new story.

What should I leave out; what could be added? etc.

Thanks in advance.

lynnythegreat

Is there a problem?

seaweedy

I would recommend starting a thread when you start the story and using the thread to post updates. You can get feedback as the story moves along from chapter to chapter.
I think the legacy is fine. The only thing I don't like (and this preference may just be personal so please don't change your style based on my opinion alone) are the transition effects between one page and the next, especially the pixelation effect. I find it distracting. Transitions are more effective, I think, when they are used sparingly.
Here are two threads that I enjoy participating in, you may also:
The Writer's Hangout
http://forum.thesims3.com/jforum/posts/list/******.page
and
Writer's Block
http://forum.thesims3.com/jforum/posts/list/187088.page

lynnythegreat

Thank you.