Wow, so much to update. I really didn't think this thread would get this big. Bah, its a good thing though. So many legacy stories to read!
And thanks, TiredHalo, for the feedback. I was hoping to get some more from others, but oh well. Its my first ever sim story and I am a bit nervous about it. Plus, I am also a perfectionist, so I love hearing people's opinions about my work, what they like and what they don't like about it, just so I can get it right.
So yeah, to everyone, some feedback on mine would be appreciated. I would like to improve for next time.
On my blog, I'm thinking of making a page with other legacy blog links. So, if you would like me to add your link to it, just let me know (via e-mail or this forum, e-mail is xokenyaownsyou@gmail.com)
pb1285n: No problem, and thanks! Your comment was helpful. I did write the thing at about 12 at night, so I was tired. I really have to read over everything before I publish it, lol. Funnily enough though, I did and fixed all the mistakes I could see. Obviously, I didn't see them all, lol.
pb1285n: Thanks. And shush, you see no mistakes. I found that one and another after I had published it. I didn't catch them in my multiple proof-reading so they stay in the exchange version.
http://castellanolegacy.wordpress.com/
I updated with Chapter 3. I switched up how i was writing. Instead of writing little by little, i grouped up a bunch of events into this chapter. That way i can spend more time playing my legacy. That way i have more things to write about. The only down side is that when it's time for me to write it's alot of information that i have to cover.
Let me know what you all think!
I found my mate(FINALLY!)
Miniie - I'll check out yours next, then it's off to bed (or maybe I'll play more sims)
Thanks! I appreciate your constructive criticism. If you find any way i can make my story better than let me know (aside from my spelling errors). I found some after i published.
BlueChan - It's no big deal. Happens to me too. I proof read over and over, but i don't actually catch the error until after i publish it. Ninja errors?
http://castellanolegacy.wordpress.com/
I updated with Chapter 3. I switched up how i was writing. Instead of writing little by little, i grouped up a bunch of events into this chapter. That way i can spend more time playing my legacy. That way i have more things to write about. The only down side is that when it's time for me to write it's alot of information that i have to cover.
Let me know what you all think!
I found my mate(FINALLY!)
Wow, looks like she had a lot of trouble settling down. So does she have commitment issues? That's a very interesting trait to give a Legacy founder.
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And thanks, TiredHalo, for the feedback. I was hoping to get some more from others, but oh well. Its my first ever sim story and I am a bit nervous about it. Plus, I am also a perfectionist, so I love hearing people's opinions about my work, what they like and what they don't like about it, just so I can get it right.
So yeah, to everyone, some feedback on mine would be appreciated. I would like to improve for next time.
Also I will read everyones blog and make a comment tonight. Though first I need to finish a few things.
EmilyBee: No problem.
I worked REALLY REALLY hard on it so please don't be to harsh!
BlueChan - Yay I'll check it out!
Edit: I like Kelita
and also one mistake.
It was other cook <--- should be either I think.
http://theoeringer-legacyts3.blogspot.com/
Gonna update in a bit with his first week.
Voted!
Rusalka: Thanks. ^^
I updated with Chapter 3. I switched up how i was writing. Instead of writing little by little, i grouped up a bunch of events into this chapter. That way i can spend more time playing my legacy. That way i have more things to write about. The only down side is that when it's time for me to write it's alot of information that i have to cover.
Let me know what you all think!
I found my mate(FINALLY!)
Feel free to put me to shame and point out any spelling errors you see in my forum posts.
BlueChan - Gosh 3 spelling errors, terrible! :P kidding...
Miniie - I'll check out yours next, then it's off to bed (or maybe I'll play more sims)
Anyone who likes my legacy should vote on the heir poll: http://forums.boolprop.com/viewtopic.php?f=78&t=41053
So bored uploading the pictures for LiveJournal.
Thanks! I appreciate your constructive criticism. If you find any way i can make my story better than let me know (aside from my spelling errors). I found some after i published.
BlueChan - It's no big deal. Happens to me too. I proof read over and over, but i don't actually catch the error until after i publish it. Ninja errors?
I don't much care if I have any slight errors on the exchange. LiveJournal is my main legacy spot and it gets caught before it gets posted over there.
Wow, looks like she had a lot of trouble settling down. So does she have commitment issues? That's a very interesting trait to give a Legacy founder.
The Genesis Challenge (Sims 4)
I'll read the rest tomorrow, too tired to do it now.