Vam-parents: From the Eyes of a child

Shadami · January 2018

Hey everyone, this used to be a thread for something else, but I am repurposing it for a story that I don't know the outcome of. Mostly because my children are in control (with some guidance of course.) You're welcome to leave comments here on it, or over on my word press. But I wanted to have a place to post new parts when I get them up, and where readers can have conversations about it. So without further ado...

The Table of Contents:

Life as a Toddler

Shadami · January 2018

Table of Contents for DBG Duke-Baker-Green legacy
Going into the Past
The Gardener
Moving On
Talking about Achievements
Side Story: Sidetracking for Grilled Cheese: Block
Side Story:Aging the Keeners
Side Story: Chance Keener's Birthday Wish
Side Story: Resetting my Sims Self
Taking a look at the family
A midnight Chance Wedding
SimSelf Family
KC: Moving in together
KC: Date Night Trend
Penpal Application: Chance Keener
KC: Accidental Phasing Amusement
KC:Feeling Alone

Shadami · February 2018

Table of Contents for Disney Bachelor/ette
S1:E1 - Meeting the Contestants
S1:E2 - Mingling and Gossip
S1:E3 - Water Park Shenanigans
S1:E4 - First Date!
S1:E5 -Fishing Elimination
S1:E6 - Musical bladder test

Shadami · February 2018

Table of Contents for Simulated Life
Meeting the Boss
The Sunroof
Shirt Swap
First Assignment
The Hangover

Shadami · February 2018

Table of Contents for 1RWT
Ruth and Robert:
Renovated Warehouse

Professor Ellis Solomon:
An Astronomy Study
A Spouse for A Professor

Alice and Andrew:
Romantic Starter Home
Getting Jobs
Nameless Retail Store
Double Date Day

Shadami · February 2018

Table of Contents for Return of the 7 Deadly Sins
Return from Pergutory
To the Island
Still want a pet

Shadami · February 2018

I've added another story about the 7 deadly sins.

They're ghosts and the first to parts can be found
here and here

Shadami · February 2018

Season 1 : Episode 3 is out for the Disney Bachelor!

Shadami · February 2018

S1:E4 - First Date!
S1:E5 -Fishing Elimination
S1:E6 - Musical bladder test

three more parts of the bachelor written and posted. xD

Shadami · February 2018

Chance Keener would like some penpals to write with.

Shadami · February 2018

New simulated life part finally!

Shadami · June 2018

Since this isn't a spoiler exactly... I think xD I'm doing some editing up and some playthoughts to get ready for some future chapters with KC the spinoff of DBG. And Donovan aged up and the people that send him gifts were his grandfathers, his dead grandmother, and his two youngest aunts... one of which is not much older than he is. xD

Shadami · June 2020

The Table of Contents:

I've added this to the first post. While you're welcome to look at the other links of other stories I still have up at the moment. Things will probably be changing. I would like to separate my stories more as they get bigger, and I have more people reading and commenting on them.

That way there is a place that specific stories can be discussed. And any tips and suggestions have a place to go as well.

Originally, this was so that I could have one link in my signature. But Changing up all of that.

ArcherDK · June 2020

Just finished reading the prologue and I have to say it is an interesting concept, to present a vampire story from perspective of a child.

There are some typos and quite too many of the same pronouns. "Her, her her her her", "She she she she she", that kind o stuff. Also, some images in prologue 3 are missing.

I really like how you presented Lilith as power-hungry, controlling and self-serving. I'm looking forward to seeing this interpretation of Lilith ahead.

Shadami · June 2020

Yeah I don't go back and edit my stories. They're typically train of thought blog type stories. And my typo corrector broke

it no longer works with WordPress, so I'm not surprised I missed stuff as I wrote. As for she she her her, my guess is that I probably wrote that way for the prologue on purpose. An annoyed child at her mother. It's been quite awhile since I wrote those original parts.

The pictures though!?! No idea how those broke, I will try to fix them.

ArcherDK · June 2020

@Shadami I've noticed this as I read on. Kathleen does appear annoyed and under pressure. BTW - do you prefer feedback on each individual chapter or all at once at the very end?

Shadami · June 2020

Whenever you feel like you have feedback honestly.

Now that I'm actually awake for the day I'll try to fix those pictures you pointed out. Absolutely no idea how they broke.

ArcherDK · July 2020

Okay, so I've finished reading your work and so I have a few things to say.

First of all, I liked the style. Remembering the past approach definitely worked well and get me interested. Kathleen is built very well as a character and I could genuinely feel her emotions as she looked through the pictures.

I also liked the fluidity of the story. It moved from topic to topic very well and never felt forced. I also liked how chapter progressively grew darker. Also, I loved how each next chapter painted previous ones in different light.

I very much enjoyed chapters after Caleb and Bella began their affair. It was really gripping story twist and I enjoyed it a lot.

On the negative side of things: too much Duchess. I love cats myself, but it felt as if her presence was just a filler. In fact, each chapter clearly had a few moments that could be removed or compressed. But that is only my opinion.

Before I continue - I understand why things progressed the way they did. Thank you for explaining, BTW. I'm in no way trying to offend you or your kids.They seem like a lively bunch :-)

With that said, chapter 10 ruined the immersion and experience completely for me. I kept on reading, but still it was just not as good. Not even remotely the same thing. A shame, really.

The best part about the story is Kahtleen herself. If is genuinely interesting to read about her reactions and emotions during her time in the cabin.

My favorite chapters are 7,8 and 9. Gripping, interesting.

Did I like the story? At first it was a bit boring, but then it definitely picked up the power. Overall - yes. It was nice and fun up until chapter 10.

Would I recommend the work? I think that yes. It definitely can entertain and has potential to it.

I think that will be all. thank you for sharing your work. I had good time reading. Be well :-)

Shadami · July 2020

Thanks for reading and I absolutely understand.

I wish I had more time to write these days but these three kiddos are quite the handful. One day I'll probably go back and rewrite it all and tell the full darker story I had in mind. But perhaps just as a story itself and not necessarily a Sims one. XD

ArcherDK · July 2020

@Shadami Looking forward to it :-)

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