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One-a-Week Poetry Contest: Week 3 - Song - Winner: jezebelthenun

There will be one poem a week for 4 weeks, each week, the community will vote for their favorite poems and the winner will be announced and win 1000 sp. (Figure since I'm spacing it out, might as well up the ante!)

So, let's break this down:
Every week you will have to do two things:
1. Post a poem
2. Vote for your favorite 2

Now, some of these poems will be hard, some will be easy.
Every Monday, I will post a theme for the week. If you can write your poem about that theme, you get an extra 250sp.
Also, every week there will be a different style, if you follow that style, you get an extra 250sp.



And Yes, you may hold off on collecting your winnings until the end. There is a potential to win up to 6000sp (might be more...the last week might have a surprise)!

For style: Song

A Song is an expression of a poet's personal emotions, meant to be sung. Lyrics in a song contain verses (lines that make up a song; sung poem) and a chorus (a repeating verse in a song (refrain).)

For theme: Regret

You have until Saturday to write and post. Sunday and Monday is for voting. Tuesday, winner will be announced.

Week Two|Week Four
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Comments

  • BlythelyreBlythelyre Posts: 4,357 Member
    edited April 2014
    Stuffs
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  • ForeverFranconiaForeverFranconia Posts: 2,154 Member
    edited April 2014
    This should be easy to me,I've written so many songs in the past...but they're probably mediocre compared what's coming...
  • cianeciane Posts: 16,996 Member
    edited April 2014
    The joy of creating and sharing...
    The joy of positive feedback...
    The joy of learning another's perspective

    We get a happy song this time, yet another weighty theme. My interest is peeked, or peaked.
  • WibbleLikeAJellyWibbleLikeAJelly Posts: 2,410 Member
    edited April 2014
    ciane wrote:
    The joy of creating and sharing...
    The joy of positive feedback...
    The joy of learning another's perspective

    We get a happy song this time, yet another weighty theme. My interest is peeked, or peaked.

    ...or piqued ;).

    I am looking forward to this one. I never really write songs so this should be a nice challenge. Interesting theme as well!
  • cianeciane Posts: 16,996 Member
    edited April 2014
    I knew someone would come along and do it the right way! ;} I did have fun thinking of peeking at everyone's working and reaching a peak in the writing though.
  • jezebelthenunjezebelthenun Posts: 2,090 Member
    edited April 2014
    So, here's an odd question. . .

    I wrote and recorded a song some years ago that would be perfect for this particular challenge. Can I link to the actual recording, or would you prefer just the written version? Or both?
  • BlythelyreBlythelyre Posts: 4,357 Member
    edited April 2014
    So, here's an odd question. . .

    I wrote and recorded a song some years ago that would be perfect for this particular challenge. Can I link to the actual recording, or would you prefer just the written version? Or both?

    Ooooh, an actual recording. Both please! :mrgreen:
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  • cianeciane Posts: 16,996 Member
    edited April 2014
  • jezebelthenunjezebelthenun Posts: 2,090 Member
    edited April 2014
    All right then!

    Backstory:

    I wrote this when I was 17. I had always been the "good one" of my siblings. Always made people happy. I was feeling like my life was going downhill. I was feeling rebellious, like a 17 year old, and it made me feel guilty. I was also trying to understand relationships in a grown up way. I had a "serious" boyfriend for the first time, and I didn't know quite how to make him happy without sacrificing myself. I didn't know what the ehem. . . "relationship" expectations were, if you get my meaning. I was lost in this young adult world.

    I recorded it when I was 22, and pregnant. So that tells you a little more about how this panned out. That also accounts for the shortness of breath and the double tracked vocals. :lol: My dad is the genius on the guitar.


    Maybe I

    Maybe I
    would be better if I went down more
    Maybe I
    should get off of my high horse
    Or if I were attuned
    to what’s inside of you
    I could try, but I don’t know
    what good it would do
    What would it do?
    Maybe I
    could be more than just a pretty face (What a face)
    Maybe I
    could be anything but out of place (Where is my place)
    Oh, but I – I just don’t know
    what side I’m standing on
    I could try to apply myself
    but my will, my will is gone
    It’s been so long – Oh

    Well I can’t be big enough
    Just out of eyeshot
    I used to be good enough
    But nowadays I’m finding out that I’m not
    Maybe I
    Maybe I

    http://tindeck.com/listen/vftf
  • cianeciane Posts: 16,996 Member
    edited April 2014
    What a nice voice you have! I know you liked doing the sound bits for your contest (but I couldn't listen to any of them, so I never heard your voice before)

    That was awesome!
  • jezebelthenunjezebelthenun Posts: 2,090 Member
    edited April 2014
    Thank you so much! I love singing, and sharing our songs with the world.

    I'm sorry you couldn't listen to the voice recordings for Experiment, too. They're on my tindeck, if you want to give them a listen. I need the house to myself to do more for the conclusion!
  • PurpleAthenaOwlPurpleAthenaOwl Posts: 101 Member
    edited April 2014
    YES!!!!! I love writing Song style!!! :mrgreen:

    Regret

    Could I be more?
    More than I am?
    If I had traveled the world
    Would I be complete?
    Should I Or shouldn't I?
    Oh how these questions torment me
    And freeze me in my tracks!
    How will I get anywhere
    If i'm scared of what i'll regret!


    Sing this to the tune of 'Part of your World' from the Little Mermaid

  • cianeciane Posts: 16,996 Member
    edited April 2014
    I was thinking of that song when I read yours, PurpleAthenaOwl.

    Jez, it was great to finally hear the tapes. Thank you! I knew Mary was innocent all along.
  • Coffefreak4LifeCoffefreak4Life Posts: 8,082 Member
    edited April 2014
    I based the tune for this on the bonnie blue flag http://www.stephen-foster-songs.de/MP3/amsong10.mp3 this is the basic tune that goes with it Im only using one verse before the chorus though most of the time
    Let go Regret

    Regrets we have many,
    but told never to look back,
    for if we do our spirit it attacks.

    Let go, regret
    never let it grab hold,
    or your spirit will have aged
    before you are old.

    Regrets are bound by memories
    but keep them in the past.
    Making new and better ones
    will keep you steadfast.


    Let go, regret
    never let it grab hold,
    or your spirit will have aged
    before you are old .

    Never sit and wallow .
    Always find a friend.
    No matter how you may feel
    They'll be there till the end.

    No mater how dire your straights
    never fear a friend to call
    for on that day you do its likely you will fall.

    Let go, regret
    never let it grab hold,
    or your spirit will have aged
    before you are old .

    Let go, regret
    never let it grab hold,
    or your spirit will have aged
    before you are old .
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  • Coffefreak4LifeCoffefreak4Life Posts: 8,082 Member
    edited April 2014
    This one is probably not my best work but anyway

    A Childs Regret

    Im tired , im weak
    i cant let her go
    i kneel down beside her
    in the cold snow

    Childhood 's Shattered . childhood Dreams .
    The Child Regrets The Child Screams

    I din't mean to ski so fast
    She was doing so well until that last...
    My parents said to take it slow
    But me peh of course not no
    .
    Childhood 's Shattered . childhood Dreams .
    The Child Regrets The Child Screams

    Please Please i scram but not a word
    A voice like mine can not be hreard

    Childhood 's Shattered . childhood Dreams .
    The Child Regrets The Child Screams

    A childs voice so oft unheard .
    so i carry her off on my own accord .
  • BlythelyreBlythelyre Posts: 4,357 Member
    edited April 2014
    Alright people, a songwriter, I am not:

    I will never hold you
    Never count your perfect toes
    Smooth down your sweet tresses
    Or kiss your wrinkled nose

    I won’t call you baby
    Won’t kiss away your pain
    I will never hold you
    Watch you fall asleep again

    You were my sunshine
    I miss you like sunshine
    I called you my sunshine
    I love you, little sunshine

    I won’t watch you grow
    Or worry about your safety
    I’ve lost all my hope
    Of calling you my baby

    My sweet perfect gift
    For your happiness I pray
    One last gentle kiss
    Before they take you away

    You were my sunshine
    I miss you like sunshine
    I called you my sunshine
    I love you, little sunshine
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  • cianeciane Posts: 16,996 Member
    edited April 2014
    So much sadness. I do hope next week is happier.

    Thinks of song, "Regrets? I have a few..."
  • BlythelyreBlythelyre Posts: 4,357 Member
    edited April 2014
    ciane wrote:
    So much sadness. I do hope next week is happier.

    Thinks of song, "Regrets? I have a few..."

    Who sings that?
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  • ThelessyThelessy Posts: 1,764 Member
    edited April 2014
    I started to write one and it came out a bit too depressing. While I don't mind a bit of sad or poignant, especially with the subject at hand, it was just a bit too bleak so I scrapped it. I may have to sit this one out if I can't come up with something a bit less miserable.
  • cianeciane Posts: 16,996 Member
    edited April 2014
    Blythelyre wrote:
    ciane wrote:
    So much sadness. I do hope next week is happier.

    Thinks of song, "Regrets? I have a few..."

    Who sings that?

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8m0dJXtwwiY

    And, no, this is really before my time, but...
  • cianeciane Posts: 16,996 Member
    edited April 2014
    Thelessy wrote:
    I started to write one and it came out a bit too depressing. While I don't mind a bit of sad or poignant, especially with the subject at hand, it was just a bit too bleak so I scrapped it. I may have to sit this one out if I can't come up with something a bit less miserable.

    I think that is part of it thelessy. It's about purging those feelings. Letting them out.
  • ErnesaTErnesaT Posts: 7,474 Member
    edited April 2014
    So far, nicely done.

    @ Jezebel ..... great job. :shock:

    @ Blythe .... again... :shock:


    I am going to sit this one out. I am neither a singer nor a songwriter but I love a great song.

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  • Coffefreak4LifeCoffefreak4Life Posts: 8,082 Member
    edited April 2014
    You could hardly put me in either category either but im giving it a try . You never know . you may come out on top
  • BklynbkbPlayerBklynbkbPlayer Posts: 49 Member
    edited April 2014
    Hello, all. I tried to find the name of the song I used but could not. I think it won't matter though, because you play Sims,right? :mrgreen: The tune is surely burned into your consciousness as it is in mine. It's the loading screen music, but only bits of it (from the "do do Do..."). Maybe one of you knows the song's title? I just sampled every song in Options and didn't find it. I bet it is there and I just missed it.

    jezebelthenun: I listened to your song and your voice and your father's guitar playing is amazing. Thank you for sharing!

    PurpleAthenaOwl: Your song had such good advice in the last line.

    Coffefreak4Life: I thought your first song was inspirational, and the second told such a sad story. I also really liked the way you did the refrain in the second.

    Blythelyre: It was beautiful and sad. I loved the line "...miss you like sunshine" so much.


    Here is my song. I would say "Enjoy!," but honestly, it is depressing. At least I have something to hum when I load my game now. :-)

    "Year Nineteen"

    When it began,
    When it was new,
    Our love was strong and true.

    Exchanged the rings,
    Made our vows,
    Our future was now!

    But life is never a dream.
    We unraveled at the seams.
    Screaming, tears, and fights,
    And the countless sleepless nights.

    Here I am,
    Now alone,
    With a heart carved from stone.

    Not a tear,
    No regrets,
    And I'll try to forget

    That life is never a dream.
    We unraveled at the seams.
    It was poisoned at the source.
    Our love had run its course.
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  • DayshatwDayshatw Posts: 5,948 Member
    edited April 2014
    Don't leave me 'cause I did something wrong
    We've been together way too long
    Don't let what I did end our relationship
    I swear all we did was touch lips
    Stay with me please
    I need you with me
    I don't know what I'd do if you leave
    Don't leave me I regret it
    I regret all of it

    She was like a brand new toy
    But I was always your boy
    I'm on my knees begging you please don't go
    But you're saying no
    You leave my anyway
    Now my light has lost it's day

    I regret it
    I regret all of it

    I know it sucks, but it's all I could come up with. It's more of a poem than a song.


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