1) Hans a coo, feeda me, padda moo, possibly, mem bo pah, pep-patay, singula, poppychay, ama weck, coputoe, chambeleck.
refrain: cooah fine-a-toe affray, hey —
emblem focree-em
nottso toe her
fay leppo- tur
nottso toe her, fey
Kree-em bosay hey—
2) Endo tree, crembrularge, ribbo free, christentarge, bokko-gort, chimbo-why, flung-a-bye, knock-a-sprep, gunka flo, gemmy flep, gunka no
foo shottso motso laday
foo shotto motso meelay
foo shotto flat bo bleekay
Luma, luma, lumAHA
nottso toe her
fey leppo-tur
nottso toe hur
fey leppo-tur, fey
Kree-em bosay hey —
foo shottso motso laday
foo shotto motso meelay
foo shotto flat bo bleekay
Luma, luma, lumAHA
refrain: cooah fine-a-toe affray, hey —
emblem focree-em
nottso toe her
fey leppo-tur
nottso toe hur
fey leppo-tur, fey
Kree-em bosay hey —
refrain: cooah fine-a-toe affray, hey —
emblem focree-em
nottso toe her
fey leppo-tur
nottso toe hur
fey leppo-tur, fey
Kree-em bosay hey —
nottso toe her
fey leppo-tur
nottso toe hur
fey leppo-tur, fey
Kree-em bosay hey —
I grabbed these sounds from the male singer. The female seems to pronounce the words slightly differently, however. Any and all corrections are encouraged. Thank you.
Just for grins and giggles I'm also working on some English lyrics — not a translation, but some words I think may fit the nature of the title, Freeing Myself. I've noted that there are thirty-three beats to each verse and I've tried to replicate that in the English version. Just finished verse 2, have the refrains as well. Let me know what you think. Again, this is NOT an attempt to translate the Simlish. Rather, I tried to "write" this from my singer Sims' perspective. He's been through a lot … first marriage just didn't work out. :shock: Again, any and all suggestions, feedback, etc. are welcomed.
Guitar Intro:
1) Not a chance , from the start , you had plans , stole my heart, wasn’t me, but my fame, I was free, just a game, candle light, did the trick, blurred my sight —
(Refrain): For some time I was afraid — Hey
to even talk about it
Not gonna work
Can’t make it work
Stoppin’ the hurt, ‘kay —
Freeing myself — Hey
2)Stepping stone, for your gain, left alone, and in pain, not by choice, said goodbye, gave you voice, reasons why, you had none, I’m amazed, now it’s done —
You’ve got some moxie, Lady
Stole my heart, just to betray me
Your words never matched your actions
You lied, you lied, you li-ed!
Not gonna work
Can’t make it work
Stoppin’ the hurt, 'kay —
Freeing myself —
You’ve got some moxie, Lady
Stole my heart just to betray me
Your words never matched your actions
You lied, you lied, you li-ed!
(Refrain): For some time I was afraid — Hey
to even talk about it
Not gonna work
Can’t make it work
Stoppin’ the hurt, 'kay —
Freeing myself —Hey
(Refrain): For some time I was afraid — Hey
to even talk about it
Not gonna work
Can’t make it work
Stoppin’ the hurt, 'kay —
Freeing myself —
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Comments
Beginning -> Verse -> Pose (trust me) -> Chorus -> Verse (x2 if you want) -> Kisses to Crowd! -> Flourish! (I love the beat) -> Chorus -> End Song!!
This combo also works for We're Moving Slow!!!
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Ssmilies246, please don't apologize for your critique. What you said was CONstructive, not DEstructive. There is a huge difference. I'm a published writer and well used to critique. As long as what's said leaves the writer room to improve, it's all good. That's what a critique is supposed to do. Point out what doesn't work so the writer can "fix" it. I like "searing pain" better and do wish I'd thought of it myself.
I'm also very glad you liked my English words. I'm not a song writer, either. This song has just been haunting me until I came up with some words — all based on what my singer Sim was going through at the time. :shock: I know, poor guy.
As for the rhythm, I saw the pattern created in the Simlish and simply used that as my guide. I'm glad it worked. This is really the first thing I've actually written since I got published. I know, I need to get cracking. LOL.
With your permission, I'll substitute searing pain for and in pain. Thank you!
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I took a little out of your one,
But changed it too.
Here it is!
What we had, Now is gone, All your fault, Left alone, In the dark, Broken heart, Tears will run, Down my face, As I forget, My love for you, It wasnt true
I can't believe that I loved you - Hey
Now I gotta let go
Gonna be strong
I'm staying strong
Stoppin' the hurt - Hey
Freeing myself - 'Ay
Pretty smile, On my face, To hide the pain, Of losing you, I want to cry, Day and Night, But I'm strong, Holdin' on, Said goodbye, To your face, Now it's done
I can't believe that I loved you - Hey
Now I gotta let go
Gonna be strong
I'm staying strong
Stoppin' the hurt - Hey
Freeing myself - 'Ay
I'm not so weak now, Baby
You stole my heart and left me
You can never hurt me
You tried, Your Tried, You Tri-ed
I can't believe that I loved you - Hey
Now I gotta let go
Gonna be strong
I'm staying strong
Stoppin' the hurt - Hey
Freeing myself - 'Ay
Gonna be strong
I'm staying strong
Gonna be strong
I'm staying strong
Stoppin' the hurt - Hey
Freeing myself - 'Ay
What do you think ? :-)
Sorry I got back here way too late, but you did an awesome job!
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