1. What do you think of my storytelling?
2. What do you think of the overall story so far?
3. What do you think of my ability to portray relationships specifically? Do they feel authentic?
4. What do you think of my new blog? Any feedback?
5. Do you think I portrayed Sofia’s addiction storyline well?
6. What is your favourite portrayed relationship, romantic or otherwise, in the story so far and why?
7. What is your least favourite portrayed relationship, romantic or otherwise, in the story so far and why?
8. What do you think of my portrayal of the Villareal family?
9. How would you interpret and describe Max as a character?
10. Who is your favourite character so far and why?
11. Who is your least favourite character and why?
12. Who would you want to see more of?
13. What is your favourite storyline and why?
14. What are your predictions for any of the ongoing (or future) storylines?
15. If you could give a piece of advice to one character, who would you choose and what would you say?
16. Do you have anything of your own to ask or add?
I like it! You have a way of letting us peek into your characters’ heads that is really endearing. Even Max, who I hate with a passion in-game, I can’t help but root for just a little. I’ve noticed that you don’t literally quote your sims, but rather tell us what they say through your narrative. It’s different from what I’m used to, but I like it. Plus, your pictures are always so colourful and bright!
I like it! I do have to admit that I was a little confused at the beginning, as it felt that I was jumping into a story on its midway point. But you’ve been playing with the Villareals long before you began to write their lives down, right? It’s not strange that it felt that way at first. You’ve given us a good overview of who everyone was and how they were related after that, and I’m super invested now, especially in Hugo (as I’m sure you know from my comments XD)
They feel real, especially Hugo and Sofia’s. With a lot of stories, relationships are either perfect, always in the middle of drama, or constantly in jeopardy. But Hugo and Sofia’s relationship just feels so real to me, especially with her addiction and Hugo’s enabling, doormat-like behaviour. People go through these struggles in real life too, and that’s what makes me really invested in the both of them. You’ve done a really good job there.
The relationship between Luna and Alyson is like that, too. You have a way of using very few words to forge very realistic, likable characters.
It’s great! You really put some work into it. I love the slice-of-life pictures at the top of every page. And adding the family tree is great for keeping track of who is who, as long as you’re not scared of spoilers. You may want to put the link to your blog in your signature, too – that way people clicking on it won’t have to make the detour of going through another thread first if they want to go directly to the blog.
Yes. Her struggles and her complete apathy towards the rest of the world, including her fiancé, were very well done. I do think she got over her addiction very fast – but the other shoe may be waiting to drop on that one, depending on how her relationship with Luna goes. I have a sneaking suspicion that she’s fixating all of her attention on Luna as a sort of substitute.
You took a premade EA family and turned them into realistic people with goals, flaws and history. I love what you’ve done with them. I’d actually love to see a sort of flashback to the earlier days, before you began to post chapters of them online. Lucy the golddigger snaring Jacques, Hugo proposing to Sofia, Luna with Alyson as a baby/toddler – moments like that. Of course, since that’s all in the past of the game, that’s a very tall order, if not impossible. xD
Neal, I think. I don’t dislike him (though he lost points by trying to steal money from his sister xD), but he doesn’t feel as fleshed out as Sofia, Hugo, Luna and Max. That’s only natural with a large cast of people, so don’t feel bad about it!
Neal, for the above reason, and Jacqueline. I’d love a storyline where she slowly works through her insecurities and comes out a better person on the other end. But who knows where life will take her? I’m eager to find out, at any rate
Hugo and Sofia, branching out to Sofia + Luna and Hugo + Nelson. I feel like we’ve spent time with them the most, and they are the most well fleshed-out of all the storylines.
I’m dreading what will happen to Sofia if something goes wrong with her Luna-infatuation. I may be completely misreading it, though, and they’ll continue to be happy together. I’m also expecting Max to royally mess life up for himself, but I can’t feel bad about that, because from the looks of it, he’s his own worst enemy. xD
Jacqueline, there are parts in the world where your body type is the epitome of beauty. You happen to live in one that think slim is the only way to go. If you genuinely don’t like your body, then train away, but don’t let others dictate what you should look like.
What made you choose the Villareal family over anyone else in the neighbourhood?
What’s the most memorable moment you’ve had while playing them, present in the story or otherwise?
How long do you plan to follow the Villareals in their life struggles? Do you have an endpoint in mind, or do you plan to keep writing and just see where it takes you?
Why is Hugo such a cutie?!
I must say: I had some difficulties in the very beginning. I had to puzzle out the characters and how everyone was connected with each other and that was a lot to take in at first. I even have a note somewhere where everything is puzzled out :P Besides that, once you get the hang of the characters, the story becomes way more fun to read. Maybe you could think about a prologue where you write the backstory? How everything started?
I like how everything and everyone is connected to each other and it sure is authentic. I have a secret love for Hugo (sorry next-door neighbor) so I'm following his story best, and I connect everything back to Hugo for some reason. I also like Max very much and I hope he'll end up on his feet eventually. There's happening so much in this family and I actually know that this could also happen in every family but just slightly different, you know what I mean? That's what makes it real, what makes me want read more, what makes me want to unfold this family. It's like... Almost too realistic for some families, but it's not.
Duvelina wrote: »
@AdamsEve1231 That's okay! If you can't catch up you can still answer the questions for where you are. There are no real spoilers in the questions.
I really like it. I’ve read stories where narration tires me but in yours I’m always excited for the next word. I like how every sentence has purpose -- it keeps me engaged throughout. I also think it fits the structure of your story as you’ve many characters to portray and your writing count is on the smaller side. It’s great because you get to convey and portray all your characters’ personalities in such a succinct way that it’s easy for me to digest them even when you have so many characters! I think its great and if I ever try to feature a huge amount of characters I’ll be taking a leaflet from your book
I’m loving the realism and detail in your story. I can imagine any one of those characters as a real life person. Their character changes, their storylines, their challenges are all really a slice of life. I also love the themes in your story. Family(Luna), ambition (Max & Hugo), intrapersonal(Sofia & Hugo), Body positivity (Jacqueline), Self-discovery(Neal & Alyson) and Love. Of course there are a lot more and these themes and characters overlap with each other so I’m really not doing your story any justice here. I also not only love your chosen themes, your portrayal of them is absolutely lovely. Your story has the right shade of bright and dark, growth and setbacks. It’s such a shame I’ve caught up completely because I love reading them all at once. And the reason is (see question 3)
Yes. The reason I can picture any one of these characters in my community/ as my neighbour is because their thoughts and actions are really what you’d expect from people in such circumstance. Some parts of your writing explores their experience with such depth that I am left wondering if perhaps you’ve been through their struggles and hence able to portray it so well. Especially some of the solutions/reprieve/progression that follows are filled with such wisdom and experience. The only relationships I’m not too sure about are the supporting cast because they’re not featured as much. But that’s how stories are. It’s impossible to focus on everyone. If no one plays support then there is no main.
Your blog is lovely. I love how the colors compliment each other and sets the mood for the story. Even though you’ve put a TW that seems pretty dark, the colors portray your story for it truly is: It’s an uplifting story about the struggles of life, but the characters will tackle them and no one is left struggling on their own (unless they choose to). That’s how your colors speak to me as a reader/browser. I also love how simple, clear and easy to follow everything is. Your cast page is so in depth I love it! I’m a fan of star signs and I love how you even put starsign traits on there for my reference.
Skeilah wrote: »
Okay I'm gonna put it in the spoiler. I can't really be vague about it but I'll try :') If you don't want any spoilers, DONT READ IT!So, I'm at this point where the next heir, a girl, became a teenager. As a kid, she had two boy friends. One is just as awkward as the girl (so like his dreamhusband for later, youknow?) and the other one basically knows about this challenge and just wants to marry her to stand in the spotlights. He's willing to fight VERY hard. I aged both of the guys together with the girl so the drama-series can go on, but now I'm like, not knowing what to do. Do I want the 'bad guy' to win (because yeah, he's pretty hot), or do I just want him to get in the way REAL BAD and let the true lover win? I don't knowwwwww because whatever I choose will affect the whole rest of the story.