Very well written! Your sims are gorgeous! Bookmarked!
@Spottydog714 thank you so much! I probably spend waaay too much time in CAS creating my sims, haha. So happy you bookmarked! xx
You're welcome! Could you possibly link the non-clothing and accessory, and hair cc, if she has it in other outfits for Desiree in that's not too much trouble?
I think Elliot is jealous of Dodi. Has someone thought of a ship name for Desiree and Elliot yet?
Love the update! Actually, these teen melodramas about friends and love never really appeal to me, but your writing style and characters are so good I love it anyway!
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Just one little piece of feedback here: Your pictures take quite some time to load and the thread will jump around a lot while they do bc you have to wait for ALL of the pics in ALL chapters to load before you can see the newest post / before the thread stops jumping around.
Now I really enjoy your story a LOT and that's why I am still here but this could put many people off and they'll leave and stop reading your story. Maybe you should make your images smaller so they load faster or consider getting a blog
Again this is just some feedback and feel free to ignore it I'll stay nevertheless bc I really enjoy this story ^^
You're welcome! Could you possibly link the non-clothing and accessory, and hair cc, if she has it in other outfits for Desiree in that's not too much trouble?
I'd be happy to list all the CC that makes up Desiree Do you know an easy way of doing this? I'm not in-game at the moment but once I load it up, I'll see if I can figure out what CC is used for her.
I think Elliot is jealous of Dodi. Has someone thought of a ship name for Desiree and Elliot yet?
Hmm... How about Ellsiree? Or maybe Delliot? Haha, cough... But I'd love to hear anyone's ideas on it!
Love the update! Actually, these teen melodramas about friends and love never really appeal to me, but your writing style and characters are so good I love it anyway!
Oh, that means a lot when you win over a critic! Haha Thank you. I have noticed my writing style is a bit different, and I'm not sure if that has scared of potential readers, I don't really follow any rules - I just do my thang lol
I just wrapped up chapter 6 found here. For a heads' up, I have started a blog where I will directly post chapters, but I'll continue to add the links here too.
Loved this it was sad to read about elliots past as well as it was enlightening. I really liked him as a character and it's nice to learn more about him
Also very nice to see that you have a blog now! looks great!
Loved this it was sad to read about elliots past as well as it was enlightening. I really liked him as a character and it's nice to learn more about him
Also very nice to see that you have a blog now! looks great!
@Julyvee94 I felt it important to give readers a glimpse of where Elliot came from, and why he reacted the way he did towards Desiree when she asked about his parents and his past. In time, with or without flashbacks, I hope to add a little more depth to each main character.
And thank you! I really loved the idea of posting directly on the forum BUT...the loading time is awful and also, sometimes my threads get jumbled up, and it's just a mess when that happens. So I'm hoping the blog will do the trick
This was a great chapter, I really enjoyed reading about where Elliot's come from and a little about his friends/bandmates. I like Elliot a lot as a character and it was nice to get a clearer picture of who he is and why. Kudos!
I started reading your story when you first posted. You have a very easy-to-read writing style and your pictures, presentation and characters are very well done. You've definitely got a fan - I'm hooked! (Congrats on the blog, two thumbs up!)
@Kaimana_MM thank you for taking the time to read! It really makes a writer's day when their stuff gets read I'm happy to hear you're enjoying the story. And yes, the blog thing is making chapter updates so much easier!
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@Spottydog714 thank you so much! I probably spend waaay too much time in CAS creating my sims, haha. So happy you bookmarked! xx
@Marialein thank you for dropping in! I appreciate it. I've been playing chapter catch up Glad to have another reader! x
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You're welcome! Could you possibly link the non-clothing and accessory, and hair cc, if she has it in other outfits for Desiree in that's not too much trouble?
I think Elliot is jealous of Dodi. Has someone thought of a ship name for Desiree and Elliot yet?
Love the update! Actually, these teen melodramas about friends and love never really appeal to me, but your writing style and characters are so good I love it anyway!
Now I really enjoy your story a LOT and that's why I am still here but this could put many people off and they'll leave and stop reading your story. Maybe you should make your images smaller so they load faster or consider getting a blog
Again this is just some feedback and feel free to ignore it I'll stay nevertheless bc I really enjoy this story ^^
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Oh, that means a lot when you win over a critic! Haha Thank you. I have noticed my writing style is a bit different, and I'm not sure if that has scared of potential readers, I don't really follow any rules - I just do my thang lol
Hehehe I like Delliot!
You're welcome!
Going in game very soon! Will see about getting a link up with a list of CC
I just wrapped up chapter 6 found here. For a heads' up, I have started a blog where I will directly post chapters, but I'll continue to add the links here too.
Also very nice to see that you have a blog now! looks great!
Until It Breaks (Complete!) | Tribe Arayeo | Discovery (Complete!) | Vee is for Vortex
Julyvee Twitter | Julyvee Youtube | A Quick Guide to SimLit | PARTY IN THE USA
Origin ID: Julyvee94
@Julyvee94 I felt it important to give readers a glimpse of where Elliot came from, and why he reacted the way he did towards Desiree when she asked about his parents and his past. In time, with or without flashbacks, I hope to add a little more depth to each main character.
And thank you! I really loved the idea of posting directly on the forum BUT...the loading time is awful and also, sometimes my threads get jumbled up, and it's just a mess when that happens. So I'm hoping the blog will do the trick
I started reading your story when you first posted. You have a very easy-to-read writing style and your pictures, presentation and characters are very well done. You've definitely got a fan - I'm hooked! (Congrats on the blog, two thumbs up!)
Sucker for pain - Evina's story
He's angst-y, for sure.