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@GlacierSnow Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed it! I haven’t entirely worked it out but I have a decent idea of the part they’re going to play.
So many questions...
However, as a self-standing chapter, it was a very nice read. I felt quite sorry for Oskar when he asked to be turned, but around the end... he was admittedly quite scary. Which is very fitting for Halloween :P
Whilst Hermione will know what I'm talking about, SPOILER ALERT for other stories here:
Anyway back to the 'chapter':
Violeta strangely reminds of both Áines mum and Yvette from Untamed, though I don’t know why.
Oh dear. That can’t be good. Oh no, Oscar 😧 Oof, and now Violeta faces an impossible choice. Condemn her only friend to the life she hates, not knowing if it’ll break him, or let him die without ever realising any of his dreams.
Sounds like Violeta was right – Oscar seems like a completely changed man now that he’s a vampire. Way more bloodthirsty, though not entirely merciless, maybe. I wonder when we’ll start seeing these two during Divided. It seems like a bit of a time jump, before then, maybe? I can’t say for sure 🤔
Oh, so I think Violeta has Yvette's same hairstyle. She's actually an edited Esmeralda Viridis, since I imagined the two looking similar! Only even Violeta is more pleasant than Esmeralda...
So everyone knows, I am in the process of writing up all the expanded lore for the Magic Universe that has come out of this story. The reason I'm holding off for now is because of potential spoilers, but once I'm past that point I'll upload the expanded lore to the blog.
I should be in bed right now, but instead here's a new chapter uploaded to the Chapter Index.
So many great developments here! Awesome to see Aine teaching Abigail to defend herself. And that second screenshot of them practicing wild magic together is a work of art!
Ooo... I really like Cordelia. Her point of view is so entertaining. Eduardo does not deserve her.
Interesting developments with Kat... I'd like to know more about Ellie.
Gideon's response to Bradach's letter made me laugh. He certainly has changed his tune. I like him.
I felt so bad for Reynold, crumpled by the door after giving his sermon. He has so much he feels he needs to hide. I think, of all the characters, I'm becoming the most attached to him.
This story is just getting better and better!
I haven't done much development with Ellie yet, all I knew is that Kat would end up falling for her at some point : P Haha yeah, Gideon's definitely changed a lot even if Kat is still keeping a level of distance with him just in case. Yeah I feel you on that one, Reynold and Clem are an interesting pair. So much to keep down, and no idea when either of them are going to open their mouths about anything...
A side-note for readers is that I have all the screenshots done for the last chapter of Act One, so that should be out soon.
It's been uploaded onto the Chapter Index.
Act Two's Character Profiles page has just been added.
Wild development with Aine and her father. And then having to run. I'm wondering how/when Reynold will find out.
Ooo! Excited to see Oskar and Violeta join the story. Violeta's dark form is so creepy! I thought she was a zombie at first!
Definitely excited for Act Two!
Seems like Clem has fallen victim to the grass-is-greener syndrome when it comes to Áine. Yeah, she’s confident and kind at the same time, but that hasn’t come from a happy place. LOL you can look like a male relative without looking like a man, Clem. That made me laugh. This conversation with Áine made her look so young.
Julian gets points for coming to pay respect the mother Joyce, and extra points for not coming in his Jacoban outfit and genuinely mourning her. He’s a complex guy. At first the guy gave me Agravaine-vibes, but he’s more complicated than that.
Hooo boy.Brádach found Áine. Oh dear. Here we go. Yes, she’s survived all this time. Yes, she’s never stopped using magic. Which means that you taking off and MURDERING HER MUM has been completely pointless, Brádach, and only made her miserable. Doesn’t quite seem to realise that though, does he? The mouldy potato (been a while since someone’s classified for that name! woo!)
Yikes. And he still thinks he’s in the right, too. Oh, gods. Oh dear. I’ve seen that black mist before. Technically will see it in the future, but details. That won’t end well. Gaaaaaah and he’s all white and grey and rotten now o.o why do I get the feeling that spell didn’t actually kill him?
Whoa. Violeta like that looks absolutely terrifying. I wonder what happened between the Halloween Special and this moment in time to make her this… feral? To the point where Oskar won’t even let her into his house. Speaking of which, Oskar! Woo! We officially have witches, werewolves and vampires now 😁
I fully agree with Oskar at the end there. Sometimes the best thing to do with the time you’re given is nothing, just sitting in peace and being in the moment.
I did that in purpose, because I think everyone would have expected Reynold to be the first to come forward and try to sort of…not sure what the word is. No-one would have expected Julian to do such a thing, but he did genuinely respect Mother Joyce even if he thought she was misguided like every other Peteran. As well as the closest thing to a pep talk that he could ever give Reynold. I think even he was somehow pleasantly surprised but he’d never admit it.
Haha yes, the bit we were both waiting for. That scene hurt to write though, her having to flee after as well as leave her paid work…I don’t think she expected to be on the run again so soon.
Ohh that, I do have an explanation for that which should get revealed later if I stick with it but yeah, Violeta is terrifying and Oskar won’t let her in his house if he has guests in for their own safety. I love Oskar so much, he’s just so weird. He almost feeds oddly similar to Morgyn in the trilogy in ways.
Indeed, sometimes it’s good to just not think for a while…and I honestly think for a few reasons that’s why Oskar does this, and why he has so many hobbies as well. A constant distraction from other, darker things, as well as from the inevitable taste for the red stuff…
I’ve not really played Vampires much, I only recently bought it, but the one family I do have are quite human-looking in their dark form, just with glowing eyes, plus they’ve only had plasma fruit/plasma packs so far. Maybe I should experiment with “nastier” vampires.
Just a note that chapters will be slower at the moment, in part because I'm still planning and in part because Genshin Impact has claimed my soul. XD
What a great start to the second act! I love the interaction between Oskar and Reynold. Oskar seems like someone who could probably help Reynold a lot... if Reynold can trust him.
I like Oskar a lot as a character. He seems complex, tough but with a good sense of his own morals underlying his actions. Interesting that he seemed pleased (at least somewhat) to see a werewolf. I get the sense that he has respect or appreciation for them on some level.
Very excited to see how things develop in Act Two!
Yeah he's definitely a complicated character, maybe like Julian in the sense that he's far from perfect but not as bad as he may seem to some. I'll reveal that in the past vampires and werewolves had an alliance, which is the Bloodmoon pact he's referring to. I noticed most fantasy as them as enemies so I made them allies. He's overjoyed to see a werewolf again, but it also brings up the question of who he sees a resemblance with, with Reynold...